Friday, 1 July 2016

SS - Dans' Script Developed

Seeing Dan and Dom perform the scene they wrote I felt the scene was really weak and could be a lot better if we develop the script more. So I took the script and re-wrote it with some improvements.

Script:

Dom:     So, I’ve read your file and it states that you are here on the grounds of your criminal activity.
Dan:       (stares blankly at Dom)
Dom:     Mr Ellington? (Pause) Mich-
Dan:       Don’t!
(Dan gets visibly agitated during this speech)
Dom:     (Pause) Mr Ellington, on record you were found guilty of murder, after five people were found dead with multiple stab wounds to the stomach and heavy lacerations down their backs. After a month long trial, in which your sentence was looking to be as long as 25 years, you suddenly decided to plead guilty on the account of insanity. This lead to a month of examinations to prove your unstable mental state. The five doctor who examined you, all reported your insanity and you were sent here to be treated. However, after a year of being here, all the doctors who examined you have later confessed to giving a false report due to an overwhelming sense that their lives would be threatened if they found you sane-
Dan:       (yelling) Stop!
Dom:     Are you saying you didn’t threaten your doctors?
Dan:       I don’t need to threaten anybody, I pleaded guilty of insanity because I am. I’m crazy … unstable … needed to be locked away safely in this place!
Dom:     This place isn’t some safe haven for criminals. It’s an institution to help people with serious problems …….. No you “need” to be here because it’s better than the other option. Better than a cold, bitter jail cell with a very friendly cellmate named Tyrone.
Dan:       I’m not stable. I need to be here! (Smiling) With the meds.
Dom:     Ahh yes, your medication (Pause to check files) A simple blend of alprazolam and diazepam. Do you know what they are (Pause-No response from Dan) Tranquiliser, basically the only reason why your neurotics are slightly disturbed right now. You don’t belong here; you’re lied to get here, taking the easy way out.
Dan:       You don’t know a thing about me, who I am, where I’ve been.-
Dom:     Your name is Michael Ellington, you are 27; you grew up in London where your parents were stabbed to death, murdered before your eyes when you were 12. You were taken out of London and brought here, Medway, where you were put in the foster system but no family would take you due to you suffering from PTS. It seems I know quite a lot of things about you, Michael.
(Dan looks dumbfounded)
Dan:       Ok. You’re right. (Smile) You singlehandedly worked out my scheme. (Threateningly) But you’re not going to tell anyone … Are you?
Dom:     You can’t expect me to keep quiet about this. When I leave this place, I’m heading straight to the police to file a report on you explaining the situation and then you will be taken from here and sent straight to jail.
Dan:       That is assuming the other crazies let you go. Actually … scratch that… let me try again. That is assuming I let you go
(Dan lunges at Dom but the Doctor intercepts and restrains him)
Doctor: Sorry about that. (To Freya) I think we need to up his meds.
Nurse:  Sure, I’ll stay here and calm him down, you take Dom to see Meg, she needs you.

Doctor: Ok. (To Dom) This way please.

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